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Scatter Brainstorm by mibi Scatter Brainstorm by mibi
whew...this took a while.... i had a full clip of poerty lying around so i thought id infuse some artsy fartsy skills and create some art poerty... this isnt my usual style but people like it... so i hope you do as well...

the original was done in 3000x2000 but i scaled it down for you modem users

thanks to n03ll3 and kipton for the masking tips

the non-art poerty is submitted here incase your get frustrated [link]

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aixerona Featured By Owner May 14, 2004
flows even better with a background to back it up. like i said, the first verses are perhaps a little hesitant, but the rest just flows evenly easier by the word. keep working at this style and get better, exploit it while it's still new, fresh. your sense of rhythm is perfect, don't lose it. the background made me realize even more, the words have their own beat, the bits of dislocated phrases are better joined with the rhythm of it all, that's why you have to try to be the least hesitant as possible. don't let me see that the first lines are actually first lines, first trials, and especially never ever let me think that you ran out of things to say and needed to finish this up in a hurry. if you ever do run out of things to say, leave it for today and come back to end it tomorrow. take a walk outside, see new faces, hear the words in the streets and all around, you'll come back with plenty (too much perhaps) to write.
hope i helped. visit me sometime, lol. :P :love: :heart:
cocoon Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2003
confusing..but that's the point, i guess...and i liked has rhythm.
beth004 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2003
I love it. I think this is the best abstract poetry I have seen yet and a nice background to boot. Nothing to really critique here. I give you kudos and I really love it. It's great. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to see if you give ~critiqueme some more of your stuff to look at.
sweetroar Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2003
Love the poetry and the background is very well done!
octoberry Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
This is so nice! The words... the back ground :D (Big Grin) Also thanks for commenting on my work very much appreciated Hug
pheozed Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2003
oh.. pretty handsome work you've done there.. Thumbs Up
manic Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2003
brainstorm indeed! :D (Big Grin)

:o (Eek)
wicked.. :D (Big Grin)
iamnophotographer Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2003  Hobbyist Photographer
i was confused at the first reading since it's the first time i read a poetry done this way. After reading it 2 times again (hey i'm slow LOL ) i really went with the flow and realized all the beauty related to the art (background) wich is more than great. beautiful scene and work.
mlthorne Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2003   Photographer
WTF. i was gone all weekend, and when i get back, this is freaking blowing my mind. i had to read it like 5 times to get it all. holy freaking cow.


like every one else said, great play on words, but i really like the red theme. and the blending of faces and people is cool with out saying. so good job. yah, after pics of bus stop chairs, and political cartoons of rummy, i never would have suspected you of this. cool. good job.
thezebras Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2003
Sweet Buttah!!! Generally I read the first line of artsy poetry and have to stop myself from poking my eyeballs out, but your work kept me laughing and riveted to my chair till the end... Kudos on the drug ring around your finger... a joke i will give you credit for until the end of time.

Mr. Zebra
dreamheaven Featured By Owner May 31, 2003
Nice work, the play on words is interesting. :) (Smile) Lovely colours used in the background as well :) (Smile)
natasha-marie Featured By Owner May 31, 2003
oooh this is sweet...
the background really does well for the scattered feel of it and the poem part is just awesome... so jumbled but it still makes sense even if it doesnt really :o (Eek)
Confused uhm yeah i think reading this broke my brain?

very nice mibi! :) (Smile)
faith1224 Featured By Owner May 31, 2003
hey dude. thanx for the comment. yea i have trouble keeping my hands steady cuz of the slow shutter speed of my camera. i have an olympus 3.2mp. any advice? but anyways, i jus basically shot the picture of the building on "Night Scene" mode. nothing special.
q2railgun Featured By Owner May 31, 2003
this is actually quite cool, love the words and the images melted together like they are. also, thanks for commenting on my recent submission :D (Big Grin)
devilmech Featured By Owner May 31, 2003
Love the play on words. I used to do this for the hell of it when I was bored. Looks quite nice with the background, and the typography is excellent
solen Featured By Owner May 31, 2003
Mraha. It's a little hard to understand, but I still like it. You gotta have something going to be able to write like that. I used to have it...
alteredreality Featured By Owner May 31, 2003
Wonderful work. The words are nice, and the art is amazing....much beter than my one attempt at art poetry. :-) (Smile)
n03113 Featured By Owner May 30, 2003
that's a thankyou to meeeee!


k.. now to the full shit..

I love poems like this.. I wish I could write them.. I should try sometimes.. but yeah- not happening tonight..

Spit baby, spit!
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