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"Primordial Soup of the Day"


Im chalant although inquiring mimes want to show
The life and times of Pontifaux.
I strike a balance,
Or was it balance on strike.
Seen enough mourning, just tell me what dawn's like.

Equal parts critic-idealist
Mimic and realist
Round off my age just to know what a wheel is.
The shyest of shysters
"Do you want your pie sliced sir?"
A guy but no geyser
The wry of the wiser
Shaped in dents, my sapience
And my Wisdom tooth,
Incisor.

I binge...and purge...
Binge and purge and binge and purge.
Cringe and merge the fringe and verge.
Atoms with Eve's drop, datum's deseased crop
Madam will you please stop...
Im half way through a palindrome
With half a talon shown
Gripping gripes of the most massive of talent tomes.

Got tickets in the brain's balcony
Through a small wicket in sane alchemy.
The lights dim
The night's whim
My first concertain.
As always...in all plays,
The beginning is curtains.
Its about my writing processes and their ilk. Dont bother to look up any words, they are not in there. Just take a geuss.

;)
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chibichobit Aug 26, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"Seen enough mourning, just tell me what dawn's like"
This seems to be a running gag in several poems with homophones glued in. However, the afore paragraph backs it up here so it actually fits. Which I like.
I like this whole piece, actually. I'm not a dictionary so I don't get some of the word-plays but overall it is very nice in my opinion.
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Tsena Oct 7, 2005
Love your poetry.
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Got tickets in the brain's balcony
Through a small wicket in sane alchemy.
The lights dim
The night's whim
My first concertain.
As always...in all plays,
The beginning is curtains.


that is fucking out of this world. i'm going to put it above my typewriter.
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skybird Jun 8, 2004   Writer
very interesante...most people cant get away with making up words unless ur still wearing a dyper but u did it and made it sound good..
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nihilim Oct 12, 2003   Writer
i agree with inebriate's question mark.

if i were to have heard this in person,
i'd've whipped my head around, and looked for who else you were hopefully talking to.

poets write the best rap.
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:iconmibi:
heh... i put it into "spoken word" by accident.... never again! never again!
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nihilim Oct 12, 2003   Writer
i didn't notice it was in spoken word.
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:iconeffervescence:
...
I'm a grammar freak, it's spelled " poetry."
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:iconintoxicated-hush:
very very nice work :hugs:
+devwatch
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livingbyair Sep 23, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
the second to last stanzas is awesome, love the word play in the entire piece.

great title.

grr...

im a useless...have you seen any of my critiques lately?
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