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"A Tail of Two Prongs"


We've talked once or twice.
Me and her labia.
Or should i say her labia and i.

"Play me a tune on your fork maestro!"

She knows, yes she knows.
Two prongs too long to tune wrong.
Perfect pitch hero harmonizing her swoon song.

She writes poetry and prose.
Well, she tries to.
Take her paragraph, tear in half
And a few lines slide through.

Her oceans aren't deep
But At least the sky is bright blue.

She is a Professional bitch.
And still cant pay the rent.
Perhaps she is in the wrong line of work.

Yet,

She's thoroughly dug.
Men with spades, jacks over aces.
"This may hurt," sifting the pay dirt
Grinning through cracks in their faces.

I mind a gem that will go lovely with my earings.
Hanging off the profiled lobes.

Sometimes then vibrate in unison.
And thats when i know to listen in.
This is another work that was commissions for 25 cents per line. [link]

It was for ~derivablezero, she asked me to write a poem about her, about her personality, the way i saw it.

And so i did. I intended no insults in the poem and no ill will. It is an honest poem, with a perpetual silver lining that is obvious to me as the writer, but not such much for her. She refused to pay the 5 dollars i asked for because she felt insulted and that the poem was crap.

I repeat, it is an honest poem with no ill will intended.

Oh well.

oh and the labia stuff is an inside joke, nothing sexual ;)
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brennanduffy Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2008
"Men with spades, jacks over aces.
"This may hurt," sifting the pay dirt
Grinning through cracks in their faces."

wow. i cant express what this means to me in words. it means alot though. thanks? yeah.
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active-archivist Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2004
i dig.
word-art is hard to appreciate...
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thinlikenate Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2004   Filmographer
this is...hey this is good. um, alright. brilliant. F+
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exoteris Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2003
diggins the mibi powrz!

Funny about the whole misunderstanding (not funny ha-ha,
funny retro-spect) is that the whole poetry deal is sort of
compacting and folding meaning into its own conunundrum
of origami proportions. Sometimes trying to find the hidden
meaning is like trying to refold a map.
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iamnophotographer Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2003  Hobbyist Photographer
Her oceans aren't deep
But At least the sky is bright blue.

delightfull ;)
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phae Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2003
I like it mibi. that's all I want to say. I've read the previous comments, and have nothing to add. I like it alot though. :D
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n0deal Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2003  Hobbyist Digital Artist
She is a Professional bitch.
And still cant pay the rent.


Couldn't help but crack a smile at those lines. I can dig it. :)
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kaujot Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2003
Gah! Greatness!

I can't add anything new to critique...Sorry. :|

:+fav: though, oh yes. It's that damn good.

Tasty.
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evilfaeries Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2003   Writer
God I feel bad cause you have all long comments yet mine is little, but all I can say is +fav.
I dont +fav many things, so feel very special.

I like the labia part.. and I love the way you just mix words togather and they are so similiar, which is one thing i hate in writing, (when two words togather sound almost the same such as:Perfect pitch hero harmonizing her swoon song)
ok i cant even explain what im saying.,
meh.

i fuckin like it a lot tho. :)

:heart: Kandice
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derivablezero Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2003
it's alliteration ;)
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